I picked a part of a piece of work where the pace felt too slow and added commas to emphasize important details.
Misty's Wedding-
Everything was finally ready. Jarie had help Misty pick out flowers, refreshments, dinner menu, breakfast menu, table cloths, candles, a cake, music, right down to an updo for the wedding. She felt as if they had single handedly kept the Fairview, Perfect Bride, Bridal shop in business for the past few months.
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