Barn Exercise 2

Perfect, I thought. The building could not have turned out more beautifully. I knew it was a good choice to paint it yellow instead of traditional red, it was just more cheerful. The paint looked flawless and it shined like a new penny. As far as barns go ours was definitely the best i'd ever seen. I swung open the hinged doors which opened into a huge open space. At the far end was a metal ladder leading up to the loft. It was the picture of good design and sturdiness. Soon I would fill the barn with piles of hay and horses, and maybe even chickens. Yes this would be perfect for starting a life out. It was a good sign, we had completed the structure even sooner than we had anticipated without leaving out any important details.

Barn Exercise

I looke in on the old barn from the old window, not to make myself depressed at the old dilapidated state of it, but to remind me of a time when I had no worries, no responsibilities. I played in there as a child when it was much newer. Now the fallen rafter in the center of the dirt floor shows the buildings age. Nothing on it looks new or clean or soft. The yellow paint on the outside is almost non existent as if the walls never had any color at all. Generations have passed through its doors to swing on the tire swing in the center whose rope was connected to the now broken wood. Before the loft collapsed we would climb the metal ladder to the top and jump onto the piles of hay below. This place now abandoned of any creature except for stray cats was once a livelihood for my grandfather, chores for my father and uncles. The hay which used to be in abundance for the horses and cows is now only small specks scattered on the floor here or there. I tried to picture it as it was so I could run around and play carefree.

Lukeman Exercise Part Two] Jennifer Cooper

I picked a part of a piece of work where the pace felt too slow and added commas to emphasize important details.
Misty's Wedding-
Everything was finally ready. Jarie had help Misty pick out flowers, refreshments, dinner menu, breakfast menu, table cloths, candles, a cake, music, right down to an updo for the wedding. She felt as if they had single handedly kept the Fairview, Perfect Bride, Bridal shop in business for the past few months.

Lukeman Exercise Part One] Jennifer Cooper

On a Sunday afternoon when I was seventeen, I started the truck that my dad had allowed me to take my younger brother to church members houses in, in order to collect money offerings. My brother and I made it safely to everybodys residentce in the stick shift truck that i had just recently learning to drive well, only killing the engine a few times. The backroad we headed home on was one that I had never driven on previously so it took me a minute to realize that the entire dirt road was in covered in different sized potholes giving it the look of a giant washboard. At forty five miles an hour, the truck began to veer all over the road before I had even realized that I had lost control, everything became a blur, I tried to straighten us out by pulling the steering wheel from side to side. Soon we were headed to one side of the road at a high speed, my brother didn't want us to go off that side so he grabbed the steering wheel and yanked it in the other direction, we went off the bank on the other side and the vehicle turned over on the way down. We landed upside down, fortunately we were still alive.